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 ninalovesyou |
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Posts: 5 12/20/08 6:41 PM |
I actually like this story. Its interesting, I'm an liason fan, so I'm not really for Leyla, but i know somehow it will end up liason, and
its just a good story, i don't see how it can make anyone angry, if you don't like it don't read it. . |
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96meimei |
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Posts: 1646 12/20/08 9:03 PM |
ninalovesyou wrote: i don't think it is a case of not liking the story it is a good and well written one. Just because it makes you angry doesn't mean you won't read it, or not me anyway, i'd rather read this than watch the crap we have going on gh now. the whole premise of the story is what gets you riled up and the comments start flying. I say continue with it and see where it takes you. I still want to see him get his ass kicked so please go for that he can't win every fight the odds are against him. |
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ghliasonfan |
Re: Foresaken Chap. 9 rated R | #103 | ||
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Posts: 1595 12/21/08 3:26 AM |
Still havnt redeemed Jason-only made him more of a jerk! Glad Liz was catty and made him feel bad! Glad that she threw that damn speech in his face. I think
that Jason could have been more faithful to Liz, he owed her that much! And then he goes and marries her a wk after she tells him she's preggers-sleeping
one time after he was drunk possibly acceptable but carrying on a relationship, noway. If things had calmed down-there was no reason to marry Leyme! That was a
slap to Liz' face. I hope she meets a hot new doc once Jake is found after being hurt- and Jason gets hurt by her moving on!
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DrinktheKoolAid |
Re: Foresaken Chap. 9 rated R | #104 | ||
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Posts: 3850 12/21/08 11:14 PM |
I like the idea of a transfusion or something like that, but it should be Jason, not Jake who would need
it.
Let Jake made the decision. 
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RainStormRaider |
Re: Foresaken Chap. 9 rated R | #105 | ||
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Posts: 106 12/22/08 1:38 AM |
Angelique,
The story is awesome and very realistic. Part of me has always suspected that Jason, when push comes to shove, will always take the easiest route and your story depicts that so well. As for your version of the Liason story, it stays true to all the underlying flaws in their relationship and plays them up so well. Please don't be disheartened and please continue this fascinating look at Jason Morgan. Most viewers like to idolize him and you've shown him to be a human being driven by his own selfish desires rather than the fangurl viewpoint that most others take. That not only makes you brave but it also sets you apart, and that is a good thing not a bad one. Plus, if current GH is anything to go by, your story is really not that far off the mark. P.S. I'm a Leyla fan so thank you for including her! |
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Angerboy331 |
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Posts: 730 12/22/08 11:50 AM |
I hope that we get a new chapter soon. I am SO mad at Jason right now!!! Poor Elizabeth, I feel sorry for her I almost don't want her and Jason to finish
that conversation. I hope that they find Jake soon.
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DrinktheKoolAid |
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Posts: 3850 12/22/08 12:38 PM |
I'm having waayyyy too much fun w/this:
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liason2hot.liasonitesgathe... |
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Posts: 873 12/22/08 11:22 PM |
It's so easy for Jason to go with the woman in his immediate orbit (can we say Courtney and Sam?) instead of fighting to be with Liz. Liz was fighting to
be a family with Jason and he kept coming up with his 'danger' excuse. Sometimes I think Jason pulls out the 'danger' card when he really wants
to get RID of the woman that he's with, so he can have a pity party. Then, once the woman (Liz or Sam) is gone, he can ________ fill in the blank (get
drunk, ride his bike with the lights out, bar fight, sex with random strangers, etc...) instead of getting professional help on why he continues doing the same
stuff over and over again. In this case, he gets another chance with having a family (since Liz wanted Lucky to raise Jake at first, then she realizes Jason
should raise his own son) of course, Lucky was the wrong choice but Liz just had to save Lucky from his drugs. Liz is no better, when she accepted Jason's
third marriage proposal, she should have told him why she said No the first two times, and, let's face it Liz, needs professional help too, Lainey would
have been busy trying to fix these two.
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diluvsrunning |
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Posts: 8651 12/23/08 12:06 AM |
I love this story so don't stop writing it...I want to see how it plays out....
actually this Jason is the one I am seeing on the screen now...the one who can't make the "right " decison to save his life....he is the biggest wimp ever and it makes me mad......he thinks he is doing the right thing by walking away and the "real " Jason would never do that....... that is why I hate Jason so much right now.....he can't be with them yet he can make a family with Leyla? He owes Liz and Jake a darn good excuse for his actions..... |
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DrinktheKoolAid |
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Posts: 3850 12/23/08 12:11 AM |
leyme's not an emotional risk.
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dndnich01 |
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Posts: 43 12/23/08 11:52 AM |
I love reading everyones' Jason-hate. I must tell you though, any story that brings along that much passion and emotion IS WORTH TELLING. Don't let
any comments discourage you. You are writing a story about a guy who is being a butthead and you got it sooo right that everyone is feeling it - embrace them
for a job well done.
I too am hoping that Jason will be able to crawl his way out of this hole and can't wait to see where you take us with this story. Keep up the good work. I can't wait for your next chapter and for Elizabeth to blast him. |
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lunna798 |
Foresaken Chapt. 10 rated R | #112 | ||
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Posts: 166 01/07/09 11:00 PM |
Chapter 10
I'm so sorry the update has taken so long. We were all struck down buy this horrible vomiting virus. I thought sneezing with a bad back was the worst it could be, boy was I wrong. Anyway I am hoping to be more regular with the updates. The docs are talking possible surgery and if that happens, it will be several weeks before I can sit. As always I really, really do appreciate the feedback.
I still own nothing; if I did I could have had other people type for me.
Married a week later. The words echoed in Elizabeth's head as she fought to get her emotions under control. By sheer force of will she pushed back her tears. She would not cry in front of him anymore. She had cried way too much already. Instead she pushed at her pain, bent it and twisted it until it became something she could use: anger.
"Elizabeth" Jason unconsciously reached for her. His body reacting instinctively to her pain, wanting to hold and comfort her. But she twisted away form him.
"Don't" The extreme cold in her voice battled with the fire in her eyes. "So tell me Jason, why is it okay for her and her child to be around you but not me and mine?"
Jason stared at her helplessly, not knowing what to say to make it not hurt.
"No answer huh?" Elizabeth turned to the window. Staring out over the lights of Port Charles she paused together her thoughts. "I am such a stupid woman."
Jason was taken aback by her tone. Instead of anger or self-loathing, she sounded almost enlightened? He watched her reflection in the window. Her brow had furrowed and she was chewing on her lip.
"So many years Jason. So many years I have held on to this love. I've told the boys about this love" She chuckled. "And it was nothing… nothing but a sad little delusion I talked myself into. You know Courtney once told me that you never loved me, that I made us all up in my head. God, who knew that all these years later she'd still be right."
"Elizabeth" his voice held a pleading tone but she refused to let him finish.
"I really should have known. You showed me enough times how little the boys and I meant to you. All those times you pushed me away, all the times you ran to do for everyone else leaving me behind. You fought so hard for Courtney and even for Sam. You gave up your life to take over the business to protect Carly and her sons. But not once Jason, not once did you fight for me or your son. You gave up nothing for us."
"That's not true Elizabeth" Jason moved towards her locking his gaze with hers in the window. "I gave up my heart for you. I loved you and the boys. I still love you and the boys." His tone begged her to believe him.
Hearing the words come out of his mouth only angered her. She spun on her heels and stalked over to him "Love us, love us. How dare those words come out of your mouth. If you would have loved us you would have found a way all those years ago. How many times Jason did I beg you to be with us? But there was always a reason Jason. Why don't you just admit you never wanted us in the first place?"
"Never wanted you? Never wanted you?" Jason was angry now. Yes he had made mistakes but he would be damned if everything was going to be dumped in his lap. "I asked you twice to marry me before everything spiraled out of control and both times you said no"
"Yeah Jason when should I have said yes. When we didn't know if the baby was yours or in the elevator when you told me you could never put the baby before Sam?"
Ignoring her comments, Jason continued his rant "You chose to lie about the baby being mine and I agreed because I love you and Jake. I would have done anything to keep you happy and safe. Elizabeth, you took it all away from me first" Jason was practically yelling at this point, his face flushed and his hands clenched.
Elizabeth stood there pale as a ghost, looking like she had been slapped. Jason immediately felt contrite. He hadn't meant to say that to her. "I'm sorry, I'm sorry", his pale blue eyes searched her face, not really knowing what he was looking for.
She wrapped her arms around herself and let out a sound, something between a snort and a sigh. "You are right Jason, don't apologize. But I tried to fix it. I thought we had gotten past it."
"We did Elizabeth because we love each other."
"Then why Jason? Why did you never come for us?" Her back was to him but he could see the slump of her shoulders and the slight accusatory tone in her voice.
"I did Elizabeth." He whispered. "I did"
Jake woke with a jerk. The burning pain in his side quickly convinced him not to move. Groaning, he sank back down. He was ling on a futon in what appeared to be a small loft. Closing his eyes he tried to recall what had happened. He remembered running out of his father's penthouse and ending up on the docks. Oh and there was the girl, the girl with the beautiful eyes. The smile that broke out on his face quickly turned to a frown. Where was she? Was she okay? And where the hell was he? Just as he decided to bite the bullet and get up he heard humming. From his vantage point he could see someone coming up the stairs. He let out the breath he was holding when he realized it was the girl.
As she cleared the stairs she looked over to where Jake was lying down.
"Oh good you're awake. How are you feeling? You probably shouldn't move too much I don't want you to reopen your wound. I really think we should have gone to the hospital."
At that Jake interrupted her "No hospital"
"Yeah, yeah I know. That's all you kept saying. Good thing for you my family is full of doctors and I've picked up a few things. Are you ok, you look a bit funny."
Jake just stared at her, not believing he had met someone who could give his mother's ramble a run for the money.
"Hellooooooo" She wiggled her fingers in front of his face. "Anyone home?"
"Who are you?" Jake finally asked.
"Oh gosh. I'm sorry. I'm Emma Drake. And you?
Leyla sat on the chaise in her bedroom staring at the pile of letters in front of her. After all this time could this be the thing she needed. Silently she got up and crossed the room to her dresser. Pulling out the bottom drawer, she felt around. Pulling out a small cell phone, she closed her eyes, took a deep breath and dialed.
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sterryvit |
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Posts: 75 01/07/09 11:11 PM
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I hope you are feeling better!! I can't wait for more so much miss communication. Who is Leyla got on the side?? And did I read right her bedroom?? I can't wait for more!! And Emma Drake finding Jake wow!! Please update when you feel better!! ~~Sarah~~ |
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ghliasonfan |
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Posts: 1595 01/07/09 11:33 PM |
Okay, first off--I hope that you are feeling better. I hope that u won't need surgery.
Now, to the story: I really liked that Emma was the girl that Jake is infatuated with. I hope that these two become an item. I am glad that Elizabeth said what she did, it is high time Jason Morgan get his. I liked how she told him how he really made her feel, and how he always put everyone in front of them. I did like how Jason did finally express his emotions letting her know that he did love them. He loved em enough to let them go and live a "safe" life. I also liked how he got angry and said that it wasn't all his fault. Also liked how he said he went after em, only question is what did he see when he went after them? Or what happened when he went out there??? And since Leyme has her own room--YAY!!!! Tells me that he is not sleeping w/her--still Jason isn't forgiven!!!! But who did Leyme call and is she working for someone??? Is this child even Jason's??? Or is she calling Robin and going to help Jason and Liz get back together??? My vote is that she isn't going to do the latter, but that she is working for someone and trying to find a weakness to hurt Jason??? 
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diluvsrunning |
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Posts: 8651 01/07/09 11:36 PM |
He did come for her, good for Jason.
What is Lelya up to and who is she calling? Can't wait for the next update, it keeps getting better and better. |
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 kermitklein |
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Posts: 3596 01/08/09 1:25 AM |
Okay, first off, hate that you were sick and might have to have back surgery. Hopefully, you won't.
Great update to your story. For some reason I knew either Molly or Emma was going to find Jake. Those were the only two girls on the show right now that I
could think of that was anywhere near Jake's age. As for Jason and Elizabeth. Love that he got his frustration out, but I really wish that Elizabeth
would have reminded him that the third time, she said yes. Is he still in the doghouse with me? Yes he is because whether he saw her happy where she went or
not, he still had the obligation to tell her of Leyla and his daughter. You would think that it would cross his mind that someday his son would want to getto
know his father and how it would feel to find out that his father had started another life with someone else.
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CMJavaGirl.thecanvasmessag... |
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Posts: 408 01/08/09 9:57 AM
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Dear Angelique --
I've really been enjoying your story and yes, it's made me a bit irritated at times. That being said, and having read the above comments, I'm putting in my two cents. I've not commented extensively on your story, as of yet, so, first, I want to say this -- please continue. You've presented us with a fictional, but quite realistic story for our two star-crossed, monumentaly short-sighted couple. My personal disclaimer: love Jason, always have; really like Elizabeth, but I have my issues. My two cents -- Jason has a very low opinion of himself and he has come by it justifiably. He has been taught by those he held in the highest regard, Sonny, Robin, Carly, Elizabeth, Emily and even Monica that he just, simply is not good enough except to fulfill eveyone else's desires and needs. Originally it was Monica -- who said after the accident that he would never be able to take a bus by himself and Alan didn't have the Doctor Son anymore, Ed Q calls him thug -- and while Jason would like everyone to believe that he doesn't care what people say -- come on, especially from people who say "I love you" in the same breath as they insult you -- it hurts. Sonny and Robin taught Jason to do as they say if you want to stay in their good graces. Both of these people give lip-service to the respect and esteem they have for Jason. Carly demands unwavering attention from Jason and his life is solely hers. Emily, specifically in the Jake situation, and I believe she knew, worked overtime to keep Elizabeth with Lucky until it was too late. But -- the worst offender, in my opinion, has been Elizabeth. When Lucky was dead she defended her new relationship with Jason to anyone who got in their way. When Jason came back (Lucky was alive) she came to him over and over, but repudiated him in favor of Lucky, who at this time hated Jason and wanted to control Elizabeth. Then she did it again with Zander, another person who hated Jason. Fast forward to the NOP and the pregnancy -- Jason asks her to marry him twice -- she neglects to tell him of his impending fatherhood because everyone in her life and important to Jason says it's better for the baby to be Lucky's -- she acquiesced, again, in favor of Lucky. Now -- Elizabeth finally tells Jason about the baby he is about to have -- a man who has mourned the loss of his fatherhood to Michael for years and she's known it -- who loves her Cam, now she asks him to let a man who hates him raise his child -- not because Jason's life isn't safe but because Lucky needed to stay off drugs. How could Elizabeth do that? This is where I become really, very angry with Elizabeth. I became even angrier with her when she wanted to keep Jason as her lover but he wasn't good enough to raise his son. The mob danger -- but, what, there's no danger from Lucky's bed-buddy going after gangster Russians, and there is no danger to the Spencers from the never-ending Cassidine feud or from a man who has man-handled Elizabeth, had a drug habit, hatred for the child's father -- I could go on, but, why? The mob danger excuse was put in play after Jake was born and Jason was tried for murder -- it was a convenient excuse. My last go at Elizabeth -- she has never truly embraced Jason or his life -- even though she has been intimately acquainted with the dangers, having nursed him through 2 GSWs. She has always held back -- in the beginning, she was really just too young. In the middle, she couldn't really accept the life and in the last few years she couldn't shake Lucky -- because you know the devil you have. My anger with Jason is that he continuall allows other people to dictate his actions even though he will argue to the death that he makes his own choices -- NO -- he makes his choices to fit the needs and desires of those who are important to him so that he will remain important to them. His worst offense has ben not standing up to Sonny and Carly. His second worst offence is not telling and showing Elizabeth that he is different from Sonny and that he can protect her and keep her safe. He puts too much of the decision-making in her hands, even when it is too his detriment. I believe too that Jason really loves Elizabeth, but is also afraid of her -- afraid she'll walk away, again, afraid she'll get hurt, afraid that someday she will look at him and see a monster. Elizabeth holds a lot of power over Jason -- Courtney was a rebound, Brenda doesn't count, Sam was a rescue -- but Elizabeth -- he loves, reveres, cherishes. She can break him. Jason is also a very bad planner for his personal life -- he can do it for the business, but not for himself. He only sees the immediate danger and that something could happen when "things" are so volatile. He's not factoring in that if he runs the business smartly, ruthlessly (and that doesn't always require blood), aggressively, then no one will mess with him, his business, his woman or his children. In this -- Jason lacks maturity. His selflessness while often noble is also sometimes really misguided. I am sorry that, in your story, Elizabeth has not moved on with another man, after all she changed towns. I do think it is good that Jake knows the identity of his father. Jason never asked her to wait for him. I do believe that he thought she would move on. The agreement was for no contact between them, at least that is implied, to me. I think it short-sighted of Elizabeth to expect Jason to live the life of a hermit -- with no one in his life for the rest of his life. If that's the life that everyone wants for Jason -- I say this -- give testimony on whoever you can, deal for a life-time prison sentence and be done with it, because living completely isolated from anyone who cares about you or loves you or shares with you is the worst kind of prison there is and ther is no crime that Jason has committed that is justification of that heinous a punishment. Lastly -- if you're writing is getting a reaction -- then you're doing a good job. Please keep writing. Rant over -- thanks for letting me vent. Lisa
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Posts: 240 01/08/09 11:32 AM |
Well now you've done it. This was my hate Jason fic and now you've changed it. He went after them! Shoot, I'm completely torn! If he went
after them, why didn't he talk to her? Even if she was with someone else and she was happy, he could have tried to be a part of his son's life, at
least. And, I do have to agree with Kermie, he should have told Elizabeth about Leyla & his daughter. He had to know she would find out some day and he
should have been the one to tell her (like the barn scene on GH - no secrets between them). But, still, at least he went after her. You've definitely
softened me up with that one.
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brooklyn729 |
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Posts: 59 01/08/09 12:49 PM |
I hope that you are feeling better. Loved the update!!! I am glad that Jason did go after them. I can't to see what Leyla is up to!!
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Lizismyfave |
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Posts: 123 01/08/09 1:37 PM |
I'm glad the virus has passed and hope your overall health improves as well.
As for the story, I don't care if Liz was about to walk down the aisle when he found her, Jason still owed her the truth.Secondly while Liz may have pushed Jason in the begining to give up Jake, Jason was fully on board with the idea, even convincing Liz it was to dangerous for him to marry her and claim Jake when she started to rethink her decision way before the 15 minute engagement happened so his "you took it all away from me first " doesn't wash with me. eagerly waiting for more. |
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